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luiz

Page history last edited by Carla Arena 11 years, 2 months ago
 
 
Since the 90´s, more and more people are having fewer children. That's because the income of the people is not enough to suport (spelling) a family with many kids. The better the education, the lower (wrong word) the family.
 
(connecting word needed) More and more women are in the workforce. The more they work, the less time they have to take care of their children. The result of this situation is that the birthrate is falling and life expectancy is growing. But who will take care of us when we become old?
 
Last week, we did a report in SBT showing that people are living longer and longer at their parents' houses. They are getting marriage (word form) later and later. (Don't begin a sentence with So; instead, use something like Therefore.) So, they catch (wrong word) more and more employment opportunities because they have only their careers to worry about and they have more and more money to spend and have a better life. 

 

 

Prime 4 - Unit 9

 

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Comments (2)

marcel said

at 8:39 pm on Sep 15, 2009

Hey Man, how are you!?
where's your comments about trend famlies? ... =]

see you,
M

Dennis Oliver said

at 8:31 pm on Sep 27, 2009


Hi, Luiz.

I'm Dennis Oliver, a friend of Carla's. I was impressed with your writing, especially with the way you used double comparatives. However, you can make your writing even better if you make a few small changes. The places where I think you need to do something are typed in blue letters. Please take a look at these parts of your writing and see if you can figure out how to make a few small changes there.

In the last sentence, you write that " . . . and they have more and more money to spend and have a better life." There's something odd here. I think the problem is the use of "and" two times. Maybe the first "and" should be "so." Maybe the last "and" needs something added—maybe "and, as a result," What do YOU think?

Keep up the excellent work, Luiz—and best wishes from Phoenix, Arizona, U.S.A.!

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