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luciana

Page history last edited by Carla Arena 10 years, 10 months ago

Prime 4 - Unit 9

 

Skeptical

 

Meaning Synonyms Antonyms Usage
       

 

People in Brazil are getting married later and later. I think this behavior is causing some consequences like smaller and smaller families.

Couples decide to have fewer and fewer kids because they want to give the best education to their sons.

Other people decide not to have children because they prefer to travel and enjoy themselves.

I think this kind of behavior happens because people are afraid of commitent and sharing their lives with another person. Sometimes It's easier to have superficial relationships. 

On the other hand, more and more people decide to invest in professional career and forget to improve their social life. Some prefer to talk to people through the internet and  fewer and fewer people avoid to meet each other personally.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Comments (5)

luciana said

at 8:41 pm on Sep 13, 2009

In the last days, people in Brazil are getting married later and later. I think this behavior is causing some consequenses like smaller and smaller families.
Couples decide to have fewer and fewer kids because they want to give the best education for their sons.
Other people, decide don't have children because they prefer to travel and enjoying by yourselves.
I think this kind of behavior happens because people are afraid of commiment and share their lives with another person. Sometimes is easier have superficial relationchips.

marcel said

at 8:44 pm on Sep 15, 2009

So, the smaller families they have, more and more education they have!
If you look well, this is a sick cycle where over and over again people want to
get rich before to have a family.

M

Carla Arena said

at 6:23 pm on Sep 27, 2009

Dear Luciana, great text about some very current trends of our Brazilian society. I agree with you that fewer and fewer people want to have long lasting commitment with a partner and this affects family trends in general. Now, just try to add some double comparatives here.

Carla Arena said

at 6:25 pm on Sep 27, 2009

Dear Luciana, your revised text is excellent. It is clear and to the point, raising some important issues of our society nowadays. Congratulations! You did a wonderful job.

Dennis Oliver said

at 7:50 pm on Sep 27, 2009


Dear Luciana,

I'm Dennis Oliver, a friend of Carla's. I was impressed with your excellent writing. Congratulations!

To the suggestions that Carla gave you, I'd add four more small things that are easy to fix:

1. In the sentence that begins with "Couples decide," do couples only have boys nowadays, or both boys and girls?
2. In the sentence that begins with "I think this kind of behavior," take a closer look at the word after "afraid of."
You might also want to check a dictionary.
3. In the sentence that begins with ">On the other hand," are you talking about one person, one career, and one social life,
or more than one? If you are talking about more than one, what changes do you need to make?
4. In the last sentence, what verb form comes after "avoid"? Is it the to + verb form or something else?

If you take a look at Carla's suggestions and at the four small things above, I think you can improve your writing even more!

Good luck—and best wishes from Phoenix, Arizona!

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